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Endism by ~TheAfterWhys:iconTheAfterWhys:

Categories Literature > Poetry > Narrative > Open


Let me kiss you
                After the rhythm and burn
                And sweat and gasp
                               of running till I quiver.

Then maybe
              you’d feel this strangled heartbeat
                                throbbing and beating
                                and screaming and  pleading
                                               in this coffin silent body.

Its tired
of being alone

It wishes
It could crawl up my throat
And into your mouth
                And wrap its coronary arteries
                About your insides.

It doesn’t know
There was never,
will never
                Be enough room
                For two.
©2009 ~TheAfterWhys
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~TheAfterWhys Mar 14, 2009, 10:52:49 PM
:thanks:

--
Whats up?
But wishing stars,
and little men from mars.
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~beautyinreview Mar 15, 2009, 2:45:58 PM
gorgeous!
it flows really well and is an astounding mixture of morbidity and grace. the ending is particularly devastating.

definitely a fave!
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~TheAfterWhys Mar 15, 2009, 5:29:20 PM
:hug: Thank you. I wasn't so sure about this one, I'm glad you enjoyed it.

--
Whats up?
But wishing stars,
and little men from mars.
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~badboysluvr Mar 15, 2009, 10:28:31 PM
Amazing description :heart:

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:heart:
Let's build a house together, You and Me far away in the night, so when they tell our story it can begin
"Once upon a Star...."
:heart:
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*ohsostarryeyed Mar 16, 2009, 5:11:49 PM
'
It wishes
It could crawl up my throat
And into your mouth
And wrap its coronary arteries
About your insides.

It doesn’t know
There was never,
will never
Be enough room
For two. '

i wish i could group together enough words to express this part's amazingalitywonderawesomeness. [that is as close as i can get :heart:]

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i like to
put haikus where they
don't belong.
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~TheAfterWhys Mar 16, 2009, 7:20:18 PM
wish I could group together enough words to express your fantasticmarvelousstupendouslylovely comments. :heart:

--
Whats up?
But wishing stars,
and little men from mars.
:iconohsostarryeyed:
*ohsostarryeyed Mar 17, 2009, 1:58:48 PM
:iconhuggleplz:
your writing > me as a whole, comments and all.

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i like to
put haikus where they
don't belong.
:icontheafterwhys:
~TheAfterWhys Mar 17, 2009, 2:55:23 PM
Not in a million years dear, =] How bout we just admit to mutual greatness and leave it at that?

--
Whats up?
But wishing stars,
and little men from mars.
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